HOLY CRAP! Thank you for the DD, guys! This is such a personal piece for me, I'm so glad it resonated with others, too. Thank you so much!
I had a hard time coming up with an idea, so I wrote what I know. Or what I knew.
Oh, and thank you to ~austinblan
, and ~Zadien20
for the word wars that forced this to be written.
This piece means a lot to me personally, so I want to get it right. I'd like some critiques to make this solid.
--Is there anything that stands out as needing improvement; any sentences that didn't sit well, any serious grammar issues that need to be addressed?
--Is it too dry, or does it keep your attention?
--What do you think of it overall?
--Any other concerns or suggestions?
Link for #theWrittenRevolution